Thread:Kenji Hiroshi/@comment-5651818-20151103104146/@comment-2182964-20151103111532

I can't complain, Brave. Though its the morning where I'm at: if I wasn't out of my bed by now, I'm sure someone would have kicked me out of it by now :P Anyways, onto Gekko.

In many ways his personality suffers because his history isn't completed yet. I know he has had problems but I can't see what those problems where, or when they occurred. You do a wonderful job of explaining what drove him to the martial arts, as well as his anger, but you've only included one example as to the consequences of those emotions: that's when he pounds the living snot out of some thugs. I also like the parallel you made between himself and Yamamoto, and I encourage you to highlight that when you explain his history. You've hit a good length, have some very nice points, but I feel his history needs some exposure to really make the section "shine". My favourite paragraph is probably the second. You explain his current mental state, how his subordinates view him, and how his duty effects him. Kudos on that.

Keep up the good work, Brave!