Thread:Saris Khan/@comment-18812574-20150130163335/@comment-1493741-20150130183721

THERE. FINISHED IT.

So, I'll agree with Chico here in that there could be a bit more done for Asuka. She largely appears to exist as a springboard for Zetsu, which, I get is part of the point, but she could've used some more to her.

That and there is an awful lot of "They've" or "we've" through out. It feels a little disjointed (We told you to beat it, rather than we've told you to beat it; They said I was a monster over, they've said I was a monster).