Talk:Spirit

Initial Assessment
Hmm, well first and foremost, you should go into a FAR more detail regarding his origins. If he is so unique this needs to be elaborated on so the reader and others know of its significance. Either include a link to an article describing his birth or include that in his history. Next, onto his introduction, given that he is what he is, you should take care to explain that while he is emotionless or perhaps lacks the capacity or ability to feel emotion, he operates by reason and logic only. Watch Darker Than Black, for some info on how such characters conduct themselves. That and its a damn good series.

Elaborating on what his current whereabouts and objectives are. Even if he has no emotions, doesnt mean he doesnt have any ambitions. Spiritual Power is a representative of one's sensitivity and willpower. Therefore he MUST on some level have some motivating goals. I cannot stress this enough, if you want this character to succeed he absolutely, positively, must have a goal, amibition or objective he wishes to accomplish. When the character is the one pushing the story it becomes that much better, as opposed to just...reacting to events happening around them.

You have him down has being a master strategist and tacitican, so obviously he must have some pass time that hones this skill, or something. Unless you plan on making him the lazy genius like Shikimaru, you should also go into detail about why he has this.

Lastly avoid to referring to RPs or anything "out of universe" when describing the character. If you need help with spelling/grammer go here: http://www.spellchecker.net/spellcheck/. I think thats it, for now, seeing as the character seems...unfinished. --- Illuminate Void (Talk) 02:15, March 10, 2011 (UTC)