Thread:Zf6hellion/@comment-8444509-20130423045816/@comment-1493741-20130423103327

Alright, I gave it a look over and there is actually very little I can say about, at least for now. But what I can say is that it lacks a bit of detail, his powers and abilities for example don't go in-depth on how he puts them to use, or what makes him good at it (Though the details that are there are a great start).

Further, I'm not sure how his Drums of the Damned are an actual ability, at its base its a personality shift which would be better explained in the personality section (Which it is already to some degree) rather than having it in both areas. The bipolar note in the Trivia should also be moved to the personality section for the same reason, its a part of the character's mental traits, something that you'd go into with some modicum of detail rather than implying and then mentioning off-handedly at the end.

Lastly, reasons are everything, what makes him want to protect those that can't protect themselves? Most people don't just gather up that kind of goal for no reason.

So the basic thing is just fleshing it out more, good luck with your character man, I wish you the best.