Thread:Saris Khan/@comment-18812574-20150130163335/@comment-18812574-20150130181545

So I have an actual comment here: The only thing I didn’t like was how pointless Asuka’s death seemed. She is set up to be this important (and rather powerful) character, and then random Soul Reaper dude shows up and kills her. And that’s it. Sure it has an effect on Kaoru’s personality, but it feels rather sudden, and like it only serves to serve the backstory, and nothing more. I myself am guilty of doing this: giving the ax to a character just so they can fit into the other character’s backstory. I would have liked to see more depth, more of a build-up to her death. The fact that it was abrupt did make it a bit more tragic, yes, but it sort of feels like it’s just “there,” right now, serving a function but not having much significance in the long run. It should make us, the reader, feel something for Asuka, not just Kaoru. Right now it reads kind of like “look at all the crap Kaoru had to deal with”, but I feel like we care more about what they do as characters as opposed to what happens to them, like there needs to be more dynamism, I feel. Or something. Maybe focus more on Asuka’s aspect in the plot, as opposed to just Kaoru. Or something, I don’t know…

And Z, please stop editing this thread. It is getting on my nerves.