Thread:Silver-Haired Seireitou/@comment-7462538-20131217081950/@comment-2089817-20131219000638

Well, first, the Greek used in this is a bit... shall we say shoddy, but translation is hardly that important. Story-wise, it definitely fits with the trend of how Bleach works, but at the same time, it doesn't mean you can't deviate a little. The story so far seems a bit rushed, but it's only two articles finished so it may be too early for me to say. Above all, I suggest to try and work on character development just as much as plot development. Don't make the characters seem like cardboard cut-outs that are just being pushed by the plot. Remember, the plot is pushed by the characters themselves, not the other way around, so focus more on showing distinct character traits; not just in battle.