Talk:Rōnin Shiba

Opinion
Hmm... well, first off, and this is just a personal thing of mine, the header quote should almost always be something that the character of the article stated, and one of their most important statements that really shows what kind of character they are. For instance, Seireitou Kawahiru's quote at the top speaks of his interests and how he defines himself as someone who "hates to lose." The quote by the Ryu Order would best go under a relationship section, where Kenji's relation with the Ryu Order is examined.

I like the whole aspect of freedom playing a huge part in his personality. It is something that can easily be broaded in RPs, so well done. History and Synopsis... I'll be honest, I'm just gonna skip over. I've kept track with some of the stories you write, and the ones you RP with the GF group, and I know you come up with interesting plots, so I'll leave it at that and assume good faith.

Abilities-wise, he seems well put together. The Healing ability should be marked under Kidō, not as its own part. One recommendation I'd make is, if you wanna still add more to him, try to see how far you can go with his speed. Considering his main element appears to be lightning, you should focus on Kenji's speed. You could come up with speed-related techniques, like Senka and Utsusemi; lightning is best known for its massive speed, so Kenji should focus on that more. Plus, the added bonus of focusing solely on speed is that since he usually uses lightning-style abilities prior to using Shikai (since his Shikai has more than just lightning), which would effortlessly throw off an opponent due to the element of surprise. Perhaps he could have a speed ability in which he sacrifices strength completely for speed, for like, a time-span of ten seconds, which would obviously cause his speed to effortlessly break limits.

Anyways, moving further down, the concept of Kyoaku is rather interesting, and definitely is more unique than the entire "oh he has an inner hollow lulz", so well done there too. Now I feel kinda silly saying that, since I see the Hollowfication below. Still, overall, the additional abilities look pretty good. The only big issue I have with this article is the organization. I mean, Kyo has his own underlined section, and then you move to his Zanpakutō, which also has its own underlined section. The same for abilities. Zanpakutō should have only the bolded title, and it should be marked under Powers & Abilities, and the same for Hollowfication. Since Kyo is technically his own person, even if he's within Kenji, he should have his own section, but his Zanpakutō and even the fused state, should be marked under that section.

Overall, on a scale of one-to-ten, I give this article an eight, but fix up the organization, and it would possibly become a nine. --Seireitou-shishō (My True Identity 20:34, January 8, 2011 (UTC)