Talk:Ryūka Injiki

Review
Being concise is a trait that rests in between positive and negative writing, and in the case of this article, it is neutral.

Ignoring the omission of the history section at the time this review is written, the author conveys ideas effectively through what words are used. However, these ideas may conflict with other canon within the series and fanon.

There is a small occurence of redundancy in personality section, mostly the word defy and its variations. This may be because the author is attempting to stress the character's righteous rebellious tendency, but it has ended up being monotonous.

The character's design has succeeded in possibly emulating another canon character in some ways, although the character's choice of casual attire conflicts with canon settings and culture immensely.

In the abilities section, the author has made good use of the article's concise nature. The descriptions are appropriate in length, but even in these, they feel long-winded. The author's intention of concealing a much stronger power under a 'weaker' facade turns out to be clichéd, not unlike many other heroes or main characters in any other series. This detracts from the character's originality considerably. Many references telling of past events and using "to the contrary" phrases creates a repetitive feel and detracts from the actual subject. It is suggested the author revise the section to create a more colorful choice of language and word choice.

PipeCleaner345 18:25, April 3, 2010 (UTC)