Thread:ShonenChicoBoy/@comment-8914761-20150130122931/@comment-18812574-20150130151341

Looking good so far. The only thing that I'm wondering about is his elemental bullet ability. It is a highly unusual ability, to be sure, and for that reason you must, must explain how it works? Why? For two reasons:

1. Most Fullbringers (that we've seen so far) have one ability that revolves around one theme. In other words, if you are an Elemental Fullbringer, your ability works with one element. Not four. Because he has four elements, you need to go into detail about why.

2. Remember that Fullbringers are still human, and the way Fullbring works is very specific. I would highly suggest that you go into the mechanics of how his Fullbring works. This is a little difficult to explain but, remember what I said about Hōsen Sanosuke? His bullets work via targeting. It's a very specific technique, with a very specific application. Fullbrings are Fullbrings, not Shikai, so there should definitely be a way to diferentiate the two. The way I usually do that is through, like I said, mechanics and application. For example, Tetsuo Momohara has the ability to control electricity. He does this by subconsciously splitting the influent/effluent currents or charged "protons" of his released reiryoku (spirit energy) in order to create an ionic imbalance = electricity. Why so technical? Fullbring is a supernatural ability, but it works in the physical world, with physical elements or constructs or matter. Personally, I think it's best to work within that realm and then go further, intead of working the other way around. What I mean is, start with the physical (electricity, fire, bullet, whatever) and then go to the supernatural (by pulling on the soul of this object, what would they be likely to achieve?)

So anyway, those are my suggestions. Take it or leave it, but keep in mind that my goal when giving advice is that I usually want to see something improve. To get better and be better than it already is. I am also concerned about cohesion: all the Fullbringers from Xstence should work on the same plane, there should be a consistency in the way that their powers work. Why? Well, that is going to allow us to focus more on the story, which is what the FC is all about, really.