Thread:Silver-Haired Seireitou/@comment-12522434-20130214171047/@comment-2089817-20130214190311

Alright, well let's see...

Personally, I have problems with the entire concept of these "Sombra". Especially how Stephen in general became one. You say that his genetic material was mixed with an Arrancar's, but understand that Kubo has already confirmed that reishi (spiritual being material) and kishi (human being material) can not mix together. They can interact but can not be mixed together, especially not genetically. I mean, that's just silly. And not only that, but genetic material has nothing to do with a person's soul. That's just... I'm sorry for sounding rude, but just completely ridiculous. But anyways, moving on.

I'd normally chew you out for using obvious re-colored images of Ichigo, but since these all seem to be on the up and up, I won't comment on it.

Appearance and Personality sections look alright.

Now onto abilities. The first issue I spot is this.


 * Blut Vene: The defensive form of blut that allows Stephen to essentially harden his skin to such a degree, that he is able to block most forms of attack. This can include spiritual based attacks, such as the Getsuga Tenshō, or physical attacks, such as attacks from swords or bodily blows.

Blut does not harden the skin. It stops the blood flow in Vene and accelerates the blood flow in Arterie. This has an effect on the muscles, apparently, and is what allows for the defensive/offensive shifts in physical strength. But it doesn't have anything to do with the skin itself. The imprint that is shown on the skin is just the reishi coursing through the blood stream which causes the effect, but that's all that represents.

Kanone is just a Cero with a new name. You might as well have just given him Cero considering the Hollow influence in these Sombra beings. And his entire Waffe is just a re-written Tensa Zangetsu, put in terms of former Arrancar power. I mean, that's not really an issue, to each his own, but it is a bit cheesy. You could try to make it a bit more original, considering you've already used the same image of Tensa Zangetsu, just with a different color scheme.

All in all, I think you have a lot to work on with this character. My main issue is that Quincy and Arrancar don't mix like that. The entire concept is just... I could speak about the issues with it for hours and hours. It just doesn't work, whatsoever. Anyways, I know I was a bit blunt, but hopefully this helps you.