Thread:Zf6hellion/@comment-9330998-20130112221752/@comment-9330998-20130112224130

Sorry for your loss, I don't even want to imagine the pain :O

Anyhow, I think it's quite good so far, it makes me look forward to what's gonna happen next. The only thing I could criticise is the slightly-too-fast pace/abrupt transitions, but I actually do the same in my Bleach fanfics (in stark contrast to my nearly-purple prose original fiction), so yeah ^^.