Talk:Shuya Raenuros

Well ...
This is in response to your request for me to review your character.

First of all it would be a good idea to have an infobox (infoboxes improve the look of a page A LOT). Second you seem to have bolded headings, which look slightly weird.

The first two sentences in the Appearance section:

"A man with purple eyes to match his purple hair. He hates when people refer to it as a being anything with black in it."

sound quite odd as well. I would advise changing them around to sound more natural.

Finally, in the powers & abilities section, for the categories (Flashstep, Swordsmanship etc.) either use the basic titles (Zanjutsu, Hakuda, Kidō, Hohō (Shunpo), Reiryoku) or the descriptive titles outlines here: Zanjutsu, Hakuda, Kidō, Hohō, Reiryoku. Any other information on his skill in those areas can be elaborated on in the description (such as specialist). Also try to put something down for all the basic categories (basically add info about his kido abilities and his spiritual power).

Other than those little things, Shuya looks good to me. His Zanpakutō is quite nice and descriptive. ^^

-- Tsukiyume o^u^o 03:36, July 2, 2010 (UTC)