Thread:ShonenChicoBoy/@comment-24089695-20150628123328/@comment-24089695-20150629041915

Do you mind if I come back after I do some work on it for some more opinions? I've definitely got a lot to work on, with a whole extra section in History so it's gonna be a bit, but I am currently revising everything I have so far and using your advice, so I would like it if you'd give opinions on the things you found issues with after I edit and add to them where they were lacking.