Talk:Spending Autumn With The Demons: John Kakusei Vs Ryūketsu Ōtamu

Blank's input
As Vice Captain of the 2nd Division (Roleplay moderating) I feel I need to give my input on this RP. Bear with me, I've only just now started paying attention to it, so if I miss any crucial details, I take the blame for it.

I'm not seeing any real problems on Mangetsu's end. He describes what his character is doing and thinking just right, and gives proper dialouge. No issues there.

NarutoKurosaki's end, however, i'm finding rather painful to read. Firstly, you're just generally bad at character descriptions from what i'm seeing. In a nutshell, most of it is basically: This dude shoots a lazer beam at your guy. And without even explaining how when or why the dude did so, he magically avoids the attack and appears behind him, unscathed. Or better yet, he just outright defends against the attack/release of Bankai energy. Do you think it's possible that you could at least tell us how he did so? I'm just saying <,<

Now I acknowledge that that isn't all that your guy does, in fact it's mostly pretty fair, the fighting in this RP. ''Mostly. I may not be the one RPing but even when reading it, i'm having a hard time believing that it's possible for someone to have more than one, even TWO Zanpakuto. ''Mang's explanation cleared it up some, but it's still a bit baffling and rather godmoddish in my eyes.

This brings up another point: How is John this strong? He's just a sixth seat, right? I don't know man, from your posts, it feels too much like John is prepared for any scenario/attack, which is something I hardly ever tolerate in an RP, even if it's not one of mine unless it's explained with a good and believable reason, or if it's a plot point, give or take.

And another irk I'm seeing, you're character is acting a bit too much like a fourth wall breaker in a small way. Saying that he avoided the strike in an Legend of Zelda style? I, of course, know what you're talking about, having played the game series, but don't you think anyone who hasn't played the game will be a bit confused? It doesn't hurt to go into detail about what they do. And lines like "YES, I AM EPIC!!!"

...really? I know that's how you want him to act but, really? Is that at all required? That's extremely corny in my eyes, and it makes me palm my face when I see stuff like that in a fighting RP. I mean, having one there every now and then is alright, but your character doesn't seem to be taking the impending threat of a painful death at all seriously, which gives Mang a good reason to get annoyed, as anybody would after extended use.

There are plenty of other instances of that in this RP that I really don't want to point out <,<

Basically, Naruto Kurosaki, detail in an RP is key. Having your character act like a goofball who treats something as serious as pain and death like a stinkin' joke is not key. Tone down the goofiness on his part, explain what he does more, and be a little bit more fair. I'm still not totally convinced about him having more than one Zanny, but Mang is putting up with it, so I can't really complain. Still, It's a good thing that Mang is more tolerable than I am, otherwise, if I were in his place, I would have stopped this RP a while ago. Yeeeeeah! Now it&#39;s a party! (talk) 22:11, September 16, 2012 (UTC)