Thread:Silver-Haired Seireitou/@comment-4509522-20140410140059/@comment-2089817-20140410140835

It makes sense, but it does sort of jump all over the place in the beginning. Like, first, it's about his loyalty, which ties into his belief in Quincy superiority, but then skips to his personal idiosyncrasies. I suppose the best thing to do is move the first paragraph down to before the paragraph starting with "Those who are outside the Quincy race", and then rewrite the beginning of "In spite of this dream and his position" to make it fit better as an introduction before delving into his actual personality.